A jisei.

[broom_rider]

Lighter than goose-down
My life is flying away...
Snow in the morning.

Kataoka Dengoemon Takafusa

In my humble translation.
The story of the translation is rather strange: I found this haiku in a book of the russian translations of jisei, it captured my attention and immediately got translated in English in my head. Then during my internet research on the Forty-seven Ronin theme (Takafusa was one of them) I found an English translation:
"A snowy morning, when human life seems to be lighter than goose-down."
unfortunately, I don't know the author of it, and even if it's word-to-word translation or a poetical try.


Kataoka Dengoemon Takafusa

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Мой английский перевод с русского перевода дзинсэя Катаоки Дэнгоэмона Такафусы, который по-русски, в неизвестно, к сожалению, чьём переводе, звучал так:

Легче пуха
Летит моя жизнь...
Снег и утро.

Comments

[jade-teacup.livejournal.com]

I think your translation is best. The other sounds a bit too matter of fact....haiku are supposed to be more about imagery.

Good illustration.

[broom--rider.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much!

May be you'll find those images of the 47 ronin interesting:
1, 2, 3

[jade-teacup.livejournal.com]

You are most welcome.


OH I do find these images interesting. Thank you very much for sending me the links....:D I might be late for church now. ;)